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Unable

Unable to speak
Unable to feel
Unable to determine what is fake and real
Unable to trust ever again
Unable to make any friends
Unable to make my family happy again
I have no emotion as I lie here
A cold and heartless monster lurks near
She told me I needed to build a bridge
Cross and get over it, you bitch!
But I am unable to cross that bridge
For I am unable to let the past be
Unable to cry myself to sleep
For this hole I’ve dug is far too deep
Pray to God, to end it soon
Shush little girl it will end soon
Shush little girl it will end soon…

Note From Author: I know this isn’t very good and pretty raw…but I just really need to get out some emotions and share them.

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Rating: 4.5/5 (35 votes cast)

{ 22 comments… read them below or add one }

1 Thiva February 15, 2010 at 12:24 PM

An excellent piece! Just what i am feeling right now…. Yes, it will end soon…i know it will…

2 Brian February 15, 2010 at 4:02 PM

It is very good I like it, keep it up, I know how you feel…

3 Adhiambo Reen February 16, 2010 at 6:11 AM

nice, but with re-organization of the same it would flow far much more better. quite creative good.

4 katy February 16, 2010 at 12:40 PM

I LIKED IT 5 STARS

5 ERICKA February 16, 2010 at 9:45 PM

THIS IS A GREAT POEM… PEOPLE KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN IT HIT HARD

6 Heather February 18, 2010 at 10:11 AM

i feel the same i know what your going through!

7 Viridiana February 19, 2010 at 11:38 AM

Es Muy Bueno!! :)

8 Mike February 27, 2010 at 12:10 AM

Very good.I feel the same way.I give it *****

9 peggy March 5, 2010 at 7:51 AM

Yes very good

10 TAZZ March 5, 2010 at 11:30 AM

every one think this way ..nice lines to express your feeling…exactly what is expected from you …
thank god poemsonly is working again ..

11 lora March 12, 2010 at 4:27 PM

that was the best poem yet you can make a song out of that……..lol

12 Angelica March 12, 2010 at 9:32 PM

boring!!!!!!!!!!!

13 quacker_jack14 March 18, 2010 at 7:18 PM

I have taken a intrest in your writings, and I have become extremly jelouse of the talent you hold. I wish nothing more then to write like you, from the heart. I do try my hardest… But I still seem to fail. But I only 13, soo I have room to grow. If you read this and if I can figure out how the heck to get mt poetry on here I’ed be more then honnored to have advice from some as insperational as you. :)

14 Leslie March 18, 2010 at 7:25 PM

nice piece….

it captured my attention….

i can relate with it….

15 Louise March 19, 2010 at 6:09 PM

Wow this is really emotional and captivating, the feelings of mistrust and the discomfort of finding yourself in the middle of misplaced truths….that’s what the poem meant to me - but as with all poems it can mean many different things to many different people

16 ehmagawd April 14, 2010 at 5:54 PM

luh-v it
exactly wat i’m feeling write now
i’m goin 2 a new skl & can’t make a lot of new friends plus my family life sucks i sure hope it’ll b over soon
five stars :o

17 karie April 21, 2010 at 8:13 AM

i love this one great job

18 brittany scott April 28, 2010 at 9:58 PM

This one has many feelings to it, and I like to let you know that this is a great poem, you did very well.

19 sg May 2, 2010 at 11:04 AM

I’m really sorry if I’m wrong but I’m also really sorry if I’m right, because accepting it is hard. But is this poem about….well…..like about you being raped possibly? Because my friend was and she felt EXACTLY like this. I really apologize if this question was out of order or in any possible way rude.

20 KK May 3, 2010 at 7:11 PM

To sg: No it’s ok your not being rude. No this poem is not about being raped. Honestly when I wrote it I was just writting how I felt…but thinking about it, it might have to do with a certain event that happened at school….hmmmm :/

21 kaz May 8, 2010 at 2:32 PM

Emotional x

22 Caroline June 22, 2010 at 5:02 AM

i like…

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