Don’t expect the best, it’s just my feelings.. I needed to write them down.
Well, I have got this feeling inside. This feeling I can’t explain. It a feeling of love, and still a feeling of sadness.
This new song. ”Taking back my love”, is it called. It reminds me of us. Simply us.
Don’t you miss, how we used to be? No, of cause not. I was you, who weren’t in love with me anymore. That leaves me, with nothing else than sorrow.
The sorrow of being left is a feeling nobody should feel.
Last time I wrote something, I wrote about my feelings for you, in a good way. To tell you how much I loved you, I wrote it all down, and you received it as a birthday present. You loved it, and you loved me. We were happy. You thought it. I thought it. Everybody thought that we were going to last, at least a little more. But then suddenly – no words to be spoken. No feelings to describe. No love to be shared. You had nothing left for me.
You made me feel sorry. You made me cry. And you knew it.
You said: I don’t want to be that boy, who makes you sad, who makes you cry, when we are together.
I answered: You think, I’m crying more now, when we still are together, than I would be, if we weren’t?
Where is this boy that I loved so much? I loved him more than words could describe.
I still love him, when I think of him. When I think of you, I miss you, yes I do, but I don’t love you.
I can’t love you, if you don’t love me back.
Gosh boy! Why can’t you see it? Why can everybody else tell me how I feel, just by looking at me?
How can’t I tell my self?
Because, when you left me, you took some of me with you. That secure part of me.
All I have left now, is an insecure, scared, sad, still in love girl, who don’t know what to do.
A definition of you, would be, a boy who loves to hang around with his friends. Who don’t want to have the time, to be with me. Who is feeling much more free and happy. If not, why can’t you tell me?
I don’t want to loose you, just because we aren’t together anymore, but I may only love you, in a different way now. I’m not sure I can do that. But do I have any other options?
by LJ
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That happened exactly to me also. I can’t understand what made things end, but keep searching and trust in God to stay with you.
This is such a great poem and i love the way you express everything and its actually true.:) i appreciate your work:)
.,it s0 sad to hear ur st0ry,but itz true,even me,i exprienz that kind of heart pain,
eventhough i l0ve her,
she still choose to leave me alone,w/o explanati0n,w/o saying any reas0n that she will leave me,
but im still h0peing that s0meday the answrs to my questi0n will revil.,
just keep in toch to g0d.
I love this poem it touched me in a gangsta way…
I LOVE THIS POEM SO MUCH IT SAYS SO MUCH ABOUT ME!!!!:):)
Oh wow. I feel exactly like that after I liked this guy in 7th grade and I only changed because another guy gave me my hope, life, happiness and joy back. I wrote a poem about him called Single Red Rose. But I love your poem so much. It touches me so well.
Wow the general idea and thought of the poem is wonderful and deep but I didn’t think the flow was all the great. But the poem was still lovely
yes, at the time, i was torn apart.
i really like your poem, it truly reflects my inner feelings. Good luck!!
For a second i thought i was the only one that had experienced EXACTLY WHAT you experienced. now i see not only one person but many from the comments. I told myself no it cant be happening.. why me? Only me?.. i guess i was wrong. Its going to be 2 years since the break up and till this day i feel this way. the way you just poured your feelings in this poem… damn its a shame but hey you know what its life and your ex person and my ex person are the ones missing out!!!
Love the poem though thumbs up
it happen to me i fall in love with a guy and he hurt my heart and he crush it and i think there are true love in the world.
OH…this is wonderful.. its like u read my mind… but the one i loved is a woman
am also going through the same thing and i don’t know how go about it
this poem has really taken me to another lever am touch.
Omg dat is such a great poem girl…it touch my heart,I even cry,cuz I know what you going through….pray God dats all I can say,cuz he da only 1 who hav 2 da answer 2 all questions…n gud job keep doing ur thing…
sweetie we have the same fate..love what you wrote very much
Lots of feelings (that’s what poetry and music do best), plus the deep personal experience that is the natural spring of good poetry. But this is a poetry website and this is not poetry, it’s prose. Here’s a trick for all you poets from a Poet: Copy your poem into a text editor then take away all the line breaks. When you read it the rhythms and rhymes (if any) should still come through as if the words were in lines, if not there is no shape to the construction that can make it a poem. Lyrical prose is a valid form of writing but it is not poetry. Keep at it. practice makes perfect. And it’s good for the soul to express your angst and good for the brain to exercise it by constructing poems.
Have you ever looked up poetic forms in Google such as Haiku, Quatrain, Ode, etc, etc. It’s interesting and all on the road to learning to become an authentic poet. Good luck.
THIS IS THE SAME ME BUT A BOY THAT CHOOSE HIS FRIENDS OVER ME AND HIS LIL GIRL TO BE
these poems are very touching and i love reading them.
wow ….something i can relate to….except played by a female lol….it was like readinng the last 3 months of my life in this poem….hey whoever wrote this hit me up on myspace or facebook….Brandon Brooks……it might be nice having someone to talk to who can relate you know….lol
I think, I am a lot easier to find. Line Kjergaard, I am the only one on facebook, with that name. add me
BE MY FRIEND
awesome! poem..
it explainz how i feel
its like yuh can see right through meh.
excellent job. =)
it is so sad how many of us are so saddned by something that should be so beautiful as love.
i share the same sentiments, there isn’t anything as painful as loving someone who used to love you.
could we talk more
omg, i feel your pain..im going thru the same thing right now..and it hurts so bad..very word describes my ex..n what we use to be.
I love it!! Keep up the good work.
I love this poem it is so saad put romantic it reminds me of myself when I was hart brokend but i got through it. at first I was sad but then I got through it. It was had but i I got through it . Now I am happy like old times i am out going fun funny and like to hang out with friends and family mostly my boy when I get one iI like to hang out with him and have fun. But now i am single. I have lots of friends so i hang with them and have fun we like to go places together. We all are outgoing and fun.
I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!
same thng happened 2 me… cant help but jst keep going.. lif s al bout expectng smthng.. but nothing comes in 2 reality… u jst made me cry wit ur words…
love can be a difficult thing. but the way i see it, its like a disease, there is no cire for a scarred heart. it may go away, but can never be completely cured.
but you can always have that support, that medicine that helps you recover, that can help you heal. only “yourself” has to have the courage to step up, and love all over again. like going back to your old life.
ive been in many situations like this. but one day, liek i did, and many others, you will find that one love. the one who will mean what he says, who will always make you happy, and just bug you to make sure you are okay. ahah. really, love is an amazing thing. you will find it. just let go of all those others who caused you pain. because if you find a new love, the old love will naturally become part of the past. =)
it was really a touching poem…
i can really feel how much you’re hurt
continue to search for love because God always prepares the best for you