You’re always gone. You’re never here.
You briefly stay, then disappear.
You’ve been quite sad for quite a while,
and rarely talk or laugh or smile.
I often hope and sometimes pray,
that God might help you find your way,
but no matter what I say or do,
the anger keeps building inside of you.
It’s sad that though I’ve helped you grow,
you despise me and you hate me so.
It’s like all you say is meant to hurt,
and made to make me feel like dirt.
I know you’ve been through quite a lot,
you’ve needed help and some support.
Someone you trust to stand by you,
no matter how or what or who.
Should I remind you who was there,
when no one else then seemed to care?
Who was then your only chum, shall I tell you? ……..
………….IT WAS MUM!
Gabrielle 09
by Gabrielle Llambias
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Awwww… I’m crying. Gabrielle I’m so sorry… you know when I was going through a really bad experiences in 7th grade everyday when I would come home from school I would unleash all my pain and anger on my mom then go to bed sobbing realizing what a monster I had become. Thank you for writting this poem… all daughters so DEFIANTLY read this poem! It’s really well written and full of depth and feeling. Please write more! Oh and if this is about your daughter I hope she comes around. God bless you and her!
She will come around and all the love you have given her will pay off in the long run. It is impossible to not love a person that you help create and that you brought into this world. Sometimes it takes time, space, and all in between. I really hope the best for your relationship for the future. Your poem is oh so real and it relates to the story of my life. Except the end, isn’t written for yours yet. Thank you for sharing.
i really inspired with this poem..i hope you can write more…
god bless:-)
thank you really. i wrote this poem a few years back. my daughter was a teenager then. she is 23 years old now and i’m glad to say….she is now my best friend! KK how old r u? you look really young but seem very sensible. thanks for your comments! god bless
gabriellex
This poem is real for many moms. I am 15, and I know i give my mom hell and maybe your daughter will come around. Maybe i haven’t, maybe i will. But try to keep the faith. Just try, though it’s hard.
Ahahahaha. I’m almost13. Really I look young? Most people say I look older… oh and thank you.
Wonderful poem… strange.. I’m in my 30 somethings and I still act like a defiant teenager at times with people I care most about…it’s been said that you hurt the people you love the most… sad but true thought on that.. I often feel like I have this monster inside me that don’t know how to get rid of.. like there is this dark side of me that is often too cruel with people I care about most. But I have the best of intentions… we know what road is paved with those good intentions though. I really am a loving a caring person… but sometimes… when there is too much pain held back inside.. it spills out the wrong way and hurts those I care most about. I am glad from your comments that your daughter is now your best friend! Keep sharing your writing! I too am a writer.. and it is in many ways a therapy for me!
That’s the way I am with my mom; and I know that’s how my mom feels at times.
thank u sooomuch for writing this,,
me an my mom are goin thru alot right now and i know i can be very hyeful to her sometimes,, she know i dont mean most of it bt it hurts,, i know that !!!
this poem is the absolute truth an im very thankfl that you wrote it
i hink you just made me rekize ALOT an solved ALOT of our problems as well
THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH !!!!
thats supposed to be hateful…btw
Thanks for your comments Sarah. yeah u kids should give us a break sometimes! LOL …..but we know you’ll come around eventually. Remember that NO-ONE ever is going to be there for you like MUM is!
God BlessXX
Gabrielle
KK have you posted any poems. cant find them.
take care sweetnessx
gabrielle
Gabrielle, take a look here KK’s Poems
It’s my fault that this wordpress doesn’t really highlight the authors better. I will probably be programing this poem site custom so it can really be about displaying poets and their poetry. It needs to be clear on how to really find more poems from certain poets.
Thank You. Yeah thats a good idea. Keep me posted pls.
gabrielle
i’m so inspired
nOw i knOw i must value my mOm..!!!
thank yOu for that wonderful pOem..
godbless…
That was awesome. As a parent I have felt like this as well and you put it into words so well. Something that I wish I could do and used to only it has been so long. Thanks for sharing.
Lovely, I love the flow. Some minor points:
“You’ve been quite sad for quite a while,”
It’s not nice to have the same word repeated, unless of course it’s for a specific effect. However, here I think you should remove the first “quite”, which would then make it: You’ve been sad for quite a while.
“and rarely talk or laugh or smile.”
I think that it would be more appropriate to put a coma between the talk/laugh as it would sound more correct: and rarely talk, laugh or smile.
“but no matter what I say or do,no matter how or what or who.”
Same thing here: but no matter what I say or do, no matter how, what or who. Also, I found this line quite confusing, can you please elaborate?
Overall, wonderful poem!
IT MADE ME CRY
I really like it..
I’m a teenager myself but I give my mom utmost respect!
she’s the best and I totally appreciate all that she’s done for me and I love her so much, and I wish that every mother and daughter have the same relationship as me and my mom cuz its really nice and relaxing for both!
So I really loved ur poem and I’m glad you two are best friends now! xD <3
xxx
I really like it..
I’m a teenager myself but I give my mom utmost respect!
she’s the best and I totally appreciate all that she’s done for me and I love her so much, and I wish that every mother and daughter have the same relationship as me and my mom cuz its really nice and relaxing for both!
So I really loved ur poem and I’m glad you two are best friends now! xD <3
xxx
Hi Gabrielle, I thought your poem was lovely. So true to life and very real. You certainly have a way of expressing yourself, the way everybody should. We are all inexplicably bonded to each of our children for always. I wouldn’t have it any other way. Once again I give top marks for your piece of work, simply because I feel it deserves it. Keep up the great work, look forward to reading some more real soon. Have a nice day!