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Hi,I was wondering if anyone would look at my poem and give me some feedback about it . Please be totally honest ! If you hate it please tell me . I admit the football dog is silly and kind of stupid , so i dont expect great feedback from it . Anyways take a look at these two poems and tell me what you think !

Greatest Treasure 

A life beyond my darkest secrets,
is a life I will never know.
A life beyond my greatest achievements,
is a life I never want to go.

Do not ask me if I'm alright,
When tears roll down my face.
A sparkling tear is something,
that can never be replaced.

Each tear I cry is an emotion,
that is lost forever.
But if all of those tears,
are put together,
they may be my greatest treasure.

Sarah Veinot

This is the Second poem :

The Football Dog 

I have a dog,
the size of a football,
That practically crawls when he runs.

For he is not bright,
does not have much sight,
and can bite so hard,
you can feel it from yards.

Did I mention he is not that big?
His name is Jess,
His nickname Ress,
and if you ever find this dog,
shake his paw politely,
and he might no bite so tightly.

Sarah Veinot